Elohim, you tried very hard writing your 5 sentences and told me a lot about what you saw in the picture. Well done. You also remembered to add a capital letter to the beginning of nearly all your sentences and you are beginning to remember to add full stops at the end of many of them.
Ms Farmer
Well done, Elohim. You thought carefully and used an adjective to describe the car. Next time think carefully how you need to start and finish your sentences.
Hello Elohim!
Welcome to 5SC and well done for sharing your work. You have some excellent sentences here with full stops and capital letters. I do hope you will join 5SC again soon.
Hi Elohim,
I really enjoyed reading your work, there was lots of description! To make this even better, you could make sure there is a full stop after each sentence. I look forward to reading more of your work!
Elohim, you tried very hard writing your 5 sentences and told me a lot about what you saw in the picture. Well done. You also remembered to add a capital letter to the beginning of nearly all your sentences and you are beginning to remember to add full stops at the end of many of them.
Ms Farmer
Well done, Elohim. You thought carefully and used an adjective to describe the car. Next time think carefully how you need to start and finish your sentences.
Hello Elohim!
Welcome to 5SC and well done for sharing your work. You have some excellent sentences here with full stops and capital letters. I do hope you will join 5SC again soon.
Lovely story. I like what you have written about the shop and I like the dog bit as well as the shop. You have done well.
Emer, Burravoe School
hello I used to come to this school Elohim its Cameron well done
well done elohim
Hi Elohim,
I really enjoyed reading your work, there was lots of description! To make this even better, you could make sure there is a full stop after each sentence. I look forward to reading more of your work!