Najma, I really like your choosing the word ‘scattered’ in your first sentence and the detail that you added to the other sentences. Do you think the word milkman might be a compound word?
Ms Farmer
Goodness me Najma!
This is brilliant writing! You have chosen what to write about really carefully and used some wonderful descriptive words to help your readers picture the scene.
I don’t think it will be too long before you are writing on 100 Word Challenge!
Keep it up!
Najma, I really like your choosing the word ‘scattered’ in your first sentence and the detail that you added to the other sentences. Do you think the word milkman might be a compound word?
Ms Farmer
What lovely writing – better than some of my year 7s. I hope some of these wonderful students are applying to LAmpton!
Goodness me Najma!
This is brilliant writing! You have chosen what to write about really carefully and used some wonderful descriptive words to help your readers picture the scene.
I don’t think it will be too long before you are writing on 100 Word Challenge!
Keep it up!
What an excellent verb that you have used – scattering. Well done.
I liked how you did the adjectives with the bottle.
Sofia, Burravoe School
Thank you for your kindness