Najma, you used your senses (sight, hearing, feeling/touch) to write about Autumn. Your word choices made it very easy to imagine the Autumn day. Well done.
I think next week you need to try the 100 Word Challenge as well!
Najma, you have really done brilliantly with this piece of writing! I really love the bonfire part as you are right – they do crackle!
You are really developing your writing and I hope to see even more of it soon.
Well done Najma, your choice of words and descriptions really helped me to imagine the scene in my mind (It almost felt like I was actually at a bonfire night celebration)! Well done. 🙂
I really enjoyed your 5 sentence challenge, Najma. I loved the words you used to describe autumn, they helped me use my imagination to visualize what you have written. However, next time you could possibly think of using adverbs to develop your sentences. Well done on your sentences!
Hi Najma, I really enjoyed reading your 5 sentence challenge. I liked how you used your senses to think of appropriate adjectives to describe Autumn. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Roehampton University Student, UK
Najma, you used your senses (sight, hearing, feeling/touch) to write about Autumn. Your word choices made it very easy to imagine the Autumn day. Well done.
I think next week you need to try the 100 Word Challenge as well!
I love your word choice. Crunchy and cracking make the sound come alive.
Najma, you have really done brilliantly with this piece of writing! I really love the bonfire part as you are right – they do crackle!
You are really developing your writing and I hope to see even more of it soon.
Well done Najma, your choice of words and descriptions really helped me to imagine the scene in my mind (It almost felt like I was actually at a bonfire night celebration)! Well done. 🙂
I really enjoyed your 5 sentence challenge, Najma. I loved the words you used to describe autumn, they helped me use my imagination to visualize what you have written. However, next time you could possibly think of using adverbs to develop your sentences. Well done on your sentences!
Hi Najma, I really enjoyed reading your 5 sentence challenge. I liked how you used your senses to think of appropriate adjectives to describe Autumn. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Roehampton University Student, UK
Thank you, I tried my best.